Self Taught

Feedback received on rough edit:

 

- The Brick Lane shots were good, there were a variety of shots, and if when the official shoot is done where there is only one character playing the protagonist it could look really good. The background scenery also looks really atistic and fits in with the music and its genre.

 

- Sometimes it could get a bit boring with just seeing a side profile of Tugrul or JP running, it looks better in the close up shots, however there needs to be more of them, and maybe some more acion rather than just running, although it will probably look better when the main free runner does it as he will be more skilled when it comes down to it.

 

- There isn't much movement along with the character, it just mainly consists of the camera panning towards where ever the runner is going, which can be quite boring. Perhaps it could be better if you used a mode of transport that could follow the free runner whilst he runs. If anyone has a car you could use and film out of the window beside the protagonist, or maybe a bus or bike?

 

- If Krishan (your free runner) doesn't end up doing it, perhaps you could make the character be doing something else rather than free running, for example, he could be on a skateboard or riding a bike.

 

- The scenes do not match up with the music, for example when its slow placed the footage is still quite fast, and when the music is fast, the footage is slow in comparison. The editing should match the pace of the music

 

- The office workers aren't dancing in time to the music, so it would be better to play them the song whilst they dance along to the beat.

 

- With the scenes with the dancers, the long shots of all the dancers dancing looks quite stiff and boring, it would be better if it just mainly consisted of close up shots of them dancing. The best shot of the dancers is the close up of their feet whilst they dance in unison. Also if the camera could be extremely close in order to blot out all the imperfections of the drama hall, instead of doing midshots where the camera pans with them instead of moving with them. Get them to dance on the spot rather than dancing whilst walking away from the centre

 

- The dancers are wearing their uniform in this, so next time they should be wearing there own clothes, however have a clother theme going on so that it doesn't look too random and out of place.

 

- The office scene with Hansen is really good, the shots look professional and the mise-en-scene looks good. You should finish off this scene properly, getting the free runner to run and touch him so he can start dancing.

 

- The scene with Mrs Jolley started off really good, the close up show of her face whilst she worked looked good, along with the lighting, as did the shot of her typing, it showed a variety of shots. However the shot from behind seemed quite lazy and it was unclear as to what was happening. The video should have been shot from the front instead. Also she isn't dancing in time to the music, so next time it would be better if the music was played to her so that she could dance in time to the beat.

 

- Dyshon and Cedrics scene probably should be reshot again. The location didn't look good, it looked cluttered and out of place along with the lighting that changed the whole lighting theme that had been occuring throughout the whole video. The acting also seemed quite forced and undirected.

 

- When Cedric threw the paper in the air, it would have looked a bit better if there was more paper for him to throw, as it looked a little clumsy.

 

- The video didn't end as good as it could have. It seemed as if more was needed, like a final conclusion.